What do you think of this text for a petition? I'd like some feedback. You should be able to suggest edits, if I've set it up properly anyway.
I'm not happy with the last sentence. It's long and clunky. I based it on the sample text that the NB government website suggests for petitions, and their version is way worse. But this is still bad. Rewording is welcome.
You can see the government's suggested text at? . It won't be an official petition because official petitions can only be on paper, so we don't have to follow their formula, which is incredibly butt-kissing and shows no sign of having been updated for the new millennium.
Thanks,
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Vivian Unger
Fredericton, NB, Canada
Land of the Wabanaki Confederacy: Wolastokuk (Maliseet) and Mi¡¯kmaq
