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Hi pam an interesting piece. Full marks for attempting this difficult form. here are my comments for what they are worth. 1. To me, the poem tells of the life of a solid dependable man, whose spirit

1. To me, the poem tells of the life of a solid dependable man, whose spirit is in the sunflower he tended, and how it grew out of his efforts, and in a way took on his energy and became him , growing

Thanks so much Pam! I kind of felt 'gazed' was better but wasn't sure why - I like the idea of a new angle. For me it just suited Pete better, but I wasn't sure how it sat in a poem! Thank you!

Hi Fiona, I’m no poet so don’t feel qualified to comment in detail. But, for what it’s worth, the – or at least ‘a’ – meaning was clear to me, and very moving. I prefer the original line

Hi everyone, So, let's give this a go! Here is a poem I would really appreciate feedback on. It is a villanelle and I'd really like to know what you think and where I could improve it. I have thought

Hi Stuart, (and everyone) Good point. Not something I had considered.? Frankly, I don't know if the point Stuart makes is strictly true, but that doesn't matter. I have tightened the visibility of