I don’t object to your new format, Vivian, though I do have a few suggestions.

In the third sentence, I’d change “an election” to “the majority of seats”.

In the fifth sentence, I’d say “under 40%” rather than “only 39%”.

In the third paragraph, I’d change “amplifies” to “exaggerates” and replace the two “nothings” with “no seats” and “none” respectively.? In the last sentence I’d insert “really” between “it” and “is”.

In the fourth paragraph, I’d insert “provincial” before “Electoral Reform Commission” or add “appointed by Premier Lord” after it.

I note that you have removed reference to the McKenna landslide - where all seats were won based on only 60% or so of the vote.? I thought that was a great reminder to the PCs of how they too have suffered as a result of our obsolete FPTP system.

At any rate, these are just suggestions.

John

On Nov 21, 2020, at 1:43 PM, Vivian <vivian.unger@...> wrote:

Hello again,

I hope I'm not driving you all nuts with this, but I've rewritten the petition. You see, I got to thinking about literacy.?

If we're going to reach more people, we need more accessible writing, especially in NB, which has a pretty low literacy rate. But the original petition text tested as "college level" and "very difficult" according to .

So I rewrote the petition to be easier to read. It says pretty much the same thing, just in different words. Here's the new text.

As long as no one objects, I'd like to go with this version.

Thanks,

Vivian Unger

Fredericton, NB, Canada

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